Oskar Mejia
Mr. John Hardison
American Literature
(Honors)
15 November 2012
The
Un-Real Law
A proposed law has come to my attention. This law goes
against American ideals and should not be passed. This law proposes that only
the wealthy and people with a college education may vote. I believe that that
would be outrageous. This would put the lower and middle class population in
jeopardy if this law were to be passed.
Does this law sound very fair? Well I say that it isn’t
and that it goes against the principle that America was founded on which was
that everyone has an equal opportunity. The line, “all men are created equal”
(Jefferson, 156), from the Declaration of Independence, shows us that American
is about opportunity. This belief that all people are created equal is what
makes this country great, and if we took this away from people this country
could fall apart.
Martin Luther King Jr. also says it in his Letter from a
Birmingham City Jail. He says, “We will reach the goal of freedom in Birmingham
and all over the nation, because the goal of America is freedom” (King Jr.,
180). By freedom he means freedom from oppression and segregation during that
time. This is similar to the situation that middle and lower class people and
people without a college education would be in if this un-American law was
passed. This law would segregate our union as a country and tear us apart.
This law would also be un-Constitutional, which would
destroy our country’s government. If this right was taken away from people, couldn’t
all of our rights also be taken away? These people are a vital part to our
country and we could destroy ourselves if we let this law be passed. I don’t
want to see America fall apart and I’m sure you don’t either.
Feedback in this format would help:
1. How's my thesis?
2. How's my support?
3. How's my conclusion?
4. What are my essay's strengths and weaknesses?
5. Any opinions?
Thank you.
Works
Cited
Jefferson,
Thomas. "The Declaration of Independence." The American Experience.
Upper Saddle River: Prentice Hall, 2002. 156-59. Print.
King,
Martin L., Jr. "Letter from Birmingham City Jail." The American
Experience.
Upper Saddle River: Prentice Hall, 2002. 180-82. Print.
United
States of America. Constitutional Convention. The United States
Constitution. By James Madison.
N.p.: Us Constitution.net, 1995. U.S.
Constitution. Steve Mount. Web. 14
Nov. 2012.
